




Date: 01 Dec 2010 2:13:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is VERY interesting! I enjoyed it a LOT!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!!!!



Date: 21 Oct 2010 2:21:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
This isn't bad. It's quite short, but length does always signify quality. I would also highly suggest that you make a new paragraph every time another character has dialogue. It is much easier to read and understand who is speaking that way. All in all, not bad and I am interested in the second chapter.





Date: 09 Oct 2010 9:48:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
i really liked the first chapter. i am writing my first fanfic too and this chapter is way better than mine is.mine was really short but i really like yours. update soon so i can read the next chapter. i really want to find out what happens. :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the support! i'm hoping to update some time next week, but don't qoute me, and good luck with your story I can't wait to read it.