Penname: ALittleLissa [Contact] Real name: Lissa
Member Since: 30 Apr 2011
Membership status: Member
Bio:

Well, I'm 15, a girl, and not very interesting. I sing, I dance, I write, I act, I go to school, y'know. Basic stuff. I've been an Inuyasha fan for as long as I could remember, it being the first anime I had ever watched, which is always cool, I guess. I'm by no means an amazing, or awesome writer, but I try. I figure if I try long enough, I might get somewhere or something like that. Also, I've officially written and finished 2 books and 2 short stories, with another book in the wing, that I hope to finish soon. If you want to read them or something, ask away.


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Reviews by ALittleLissa
Summary:

Tomoe Fuchi Higurashi is your average teenage girl; just turned 18, stuck with loving parents, a slightly superstitious grandfather, an annoying little sister and living at the only remaining shrine in Tokyo..

Little does she know that she's the daughter of a God and destined to travel back to Feudal Japan to finish what her great-aunt Kagome Higurashi has started.

How will she cope with; her newfound powersa grieving half-Demon, a lecherous Demon Lord, a perverted monkthe handsome brother-in-law of her aunt and a poisoned mark?


Categories: Humor, Action/ Adventure, Romance, Adult
Characters: Inu Yasha
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 27247 Read Count: 1064
[Report This] Published: 07 Nov 2011 Updated: 26 Nov 2011
Reviewer: ALittleLissa Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 15 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Restless Warrior - InuYasha 18 [The Illusion shattered]

I'm really liking what you've done with the story-line and the characters. The character development itself is very well done, and I'm excited to see more. A few minor pointers, though. Though your writing is well put together and dialogue structure is good, it would be nice if you could do the standard seperations between each speaker, like every time a different person speaks, it's a new paragraph. Makes it easier on my eyes to read and distinguish who's saying what. Also, it be nice if you gave a little more description into everything. There is some, but bringing it to a higher level would make the story itself 2 times better, at least. What I mean by that, is explain the atmosphere, what things look like in detail even just to fill up extra space in a chapter. As well, explain the atmosphere of conversation or action, if it's tense, or light and air. So far, it's been good, but there have been moments where I've noticed a bit less of a description and I have a more difficult time picturing where it is they are and what it could look like. Having watched every single Inuyasha episode at least 3 times, I've become accustomed to the speech patterns and kinds of atmospheres that occur in the series as a whole, but if someone who was a little less farmilliar was reading this, they might have a harder time. Anyways, you're doing an amazing job, so keep up the good work! Sorry for writing so long, but I hope this information will help better your story! :)