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Reviewer: Inu_Miroku_fangurl Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Aug 2009 6:54:44 PM Title: Confusion

I'm glad tha you decide t e back on andwrite. I forgot about te site ometarily to, so ta's why I'm just getting back on and readingwht elseyou hae. I love what you're doing here with the story, and I hope you get in a few more chapters

Reviewer: BiNeko Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2008 2:38:09 PM Title: Dear brother

I kinda like the idea of this...but the structure of the text itself is very confusing. I'm sorry if it's harsh, but it's my honest opinion...A lot of mistakes, grammar mistakes I mean. The words themselves were spelled correctly, but weren't the right form. Like for example; "His councious said to him" (this is an example, can't remember what it said exactly) Conscious like that isn't right. It would be "Conscience".

 

I'm just trying to help XD

 

-Yuya-Sama

Reviewer: Inu_Miroku_fangurl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Nov 2007 3:23:05 PM Title: Dear brother

Oh my god! is inuyasha going to become his brothers mate? O_o I hope so! ^_^ Can't wait for you to finish this up! update soon!

Author's Response: LOL omg! y'know what! I totally forgot about this site! Gomen! I'll update! XD

Reviewer: Lupi Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Oct 2007 7:37:16 AM Title: Dear brother

*gasps dramatically* I know you!

But moving onto the reason why I'm here. I decided that I ought to broaden my horizons and despite my dislike for OOCness have a read of what your darling mind has produced. 

Your writing itself is pretty good. Not absolutely fantastial (I'm sorry I'm so harsh!), but it's much better than most of the things I read. I'd watch your syntax though, sometimes your sentences sound a tad awkward. But you said you'd improved as this story continued with the story, so don't worry too much about that. 

The only thing I can really pick at is the fact that the letter has nothing to signify that Inuyasha's reading it. I'd put either quotation marks or italize it, just so it's not so confusing. 

I must say though, I'm really happy to see tha tyou have good spelling and grammar; they're pet peeves of mine. I can't recall any huge mistakes (or any errors at all), so fantastic work on that.

I think Inuyasha's giving in too easily though! And that Sesshomaru apologised! Grrr... I'm hoping he'll go back on his words and be all like: "I wrote nothing of the sort, half-breed." But I doubt he will. UU; I need arguments! Shameless, stupid bickering! Please tell me there's bickering. *begs*

I'm eagerly awaiting your next update; I must see how their relationship progresses.

See you around,

- Lupi



Author's Response:

LOL I KNOW YOU TOO! I was like uhhh... O_o *scroll* Oh~!  Hahaha thanks for the review!

 Some of the stuff is copied and pasted from othersites that don't have that Italic junk so yeah, I'mma  bit lazy going through it and doing that stuff.

 Lawl, I'll try to make some bickering just for you since you reviewed hehe ^^; Might be some good parts for that coming up anyways.

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