Date: 09 May 2009 6:39:01 PM Title: Chapter 1: Beautiful Disaster
You need to seperate the paragraphs. Its pretty good! ^_^ you might just want to double check before you post a chapter. My computer does it to me all the time so I click preview before I post the chapter.
A good start to what might be a really good story ^_^
Author's Response: That's my single problem paragraphs^_^ I was never really good at that. But I will preview before I post. I have another story I'm typing and it is definetly going to be better then this one!