[Report This]Date: 18 Aug 2007 11:52:59 PM Title: Even Heroes Fall
The love scene is much more realistic than I have read in a while and for that I have to thank you. It is almost endearing the way they have come together and for once Inu Yasha is not the gruff and crude hanyou.
Author's Response:
I tried to make the reader see that Inuyasha was also a virgin as living the life of a hanyou, as he had, I would assume he would not have had any chances to mate before. I hope the innocence and wonder on both their parts came through well.
~*Luce*~
[Report This]Date: 14 Aug 2007 1:54:29 PM Title: Shame and Chagrin
I think this is a fitting way to write how Naraku died. I would imagine Sesshoumaru could not go unscathed in such a battle. Quite a few good players in the original plot died. Not only does this simplify maintaining how many characters you have to include in dialogue, but you will be able to focus on the plot.
You have done a good job maintaing the personalities of each character. I like the inclusion of Rin in this piece. I also like the side thoughts that Sesshoumaru has made in his analysis of Kagome.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much, this is my first attempt at writing anything for other people to read in about 11 years. I have tried very hard to keep the characters canon.
Several of the main players had to go as I am doing this as a continuation of the anime, because I haven't been satisfied with where the manga has taken it, and in order for things to go as I wanted there needed to be a reduction of players, don't worry there will be more action as it progresses.
~*Luce*~
[Report This]Date: 10 Aug 2007 6:19:18 PM Title: The Prodigal Preistess Returns
good job!! great story
(pats head gives you cookie)
Author's Response:
I like cookies.
~*Luce*~